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Hello there :) This is quite a powerful story. I would give you a much more detailed review but I don't have much time left. There were a few spelling ...

Hello there :) “Are you sure this is what you want to spend your money on, Rebecca?” The girl’s mother asked, looking at the girl with stern eyes. “I won’t ...

Hello there Missy :) It looks good. I like how everything is building up and where the events are going. This is a very creative story, I can't wait until ...

Hello there :) Nice. Out of all the poems I've reviewed today, this is by far the most honest and creative. I like the unique syllable thing which I think ...

Hello there :) I'm with Lilchoma on this one. I think that you seem to have everything so lightly written that it loses the poetic sense in terms of emotion ...

Hello there :) Now I'm not much of a poet but I'll do my best to tell you what I think. It was okay. I mean most of the time ...

Hey there :) I hope I don't sound harsh or anything but I did not enjoy this. Yes there are bits in there that are creative like the repetition of ...

Hello there :) Since you are relatively new, welcome to YWS I really liked the poem...the first three stanzas that is. I could feel a lot of emotion and the ...

Hello there :) Well I'm not really a poet, I have to say, I thought the first two lines were spot on perfect. I was a little disappointed that you ...

Hello there :) Since you are relatively new, welcome to YWS! My room was small and cold. It was made of nothing but cement, except for the old, weak cot, ...

Hello there Missy :) "Amiria!” I sighed, why couldn't I be alone for more than a few minutes? I mean seriously! "AMIRIA!!!!!" ugh,"Over here!" I shouted back. This is a ...

Hello there :) Looks like the reviewer before me has done a pretty good job at outlining the mistakes in this piece. So I'll just go ahead and leave my ...

Hello there :) She sat there lost in her own thought which she thought (why not try another word here, like 'presumed'.) was genius and we all pressumed was idiotic. ...

Hello there. :) So, an interesting plot. However, your punctuation is lacking in some areas. An eerie whisper echos down the hallway , "If you ever tell anyone what you ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I will firstly start with the flaws of your piece. My fiancée and I were at the Esquire ball having a ball (ball ...