Nothing More

Hey there

I hope I don't sound harsh or anything but I did not enjoy this. Yes there are bits in there that are creative like the repetition of "and more", but without punctuation on the most part, it's hard to have it believable. I thought it was just average and cliché and nothing more or special. Also, most of the time it did not feel like I was reading a poem, but instead, an introduction to a story. However, I see a light in your poetic skills. I'm not much of a poet myself, but hey, I believe with more practice and passion, you can produce great work.

Keep writing.

I really enjoyed "More" this is a well thought out poem, little childish word play, but I enjoyed it. It allows more readers to understand and relate. The last stanza is a great ending with a good beginning, but the body is a little sloppy, but that may be the way you want it. I am really looking forward to hearing more from you.

Thank you for the poem, check out mine and tell me what you think!

It's good. I think that having 'and more' at the end of each stanza is a little akward, although I can see why you have done it. I also think you need to expand a lot more on the lest stanza because it's unclear what the message of this poem is, really. Is it general repulse to pleasure? To what extent is it religious? etc.

Oh boy I'm here with the review you asked for. I'm gonna have a really tough time reviewing this. You did a pretty good job on this one with errors. XP

First suggestion you don't have to but you should consider putting a comma before the "and more" at the end of every stanza. It let's you pause when reading it and adds some empahzis to the words.
Also this stanza here.

Then I chide #FF0000 ">myself
and remind myself,they are foolish mortals
nothing more.