zelithon

The guy who got shot in the head was BAD guy anyway. I wannnaknow if he gets caught because the woman saw him. :?: Also your story is 16+ and ...

Extremly well written! Very creative. :P

Ah. very good. Very deserty. :P

It was good! And it matches your avatar. :P

Nice, but there shuold be no capitals. I read that hiakus were supposed to have none. Other wise good younge grasshopper. :wink:

I am not actually mad, you know. :D I feel speacal a girl got saved from rape on MY birthday. I am the BEST! :P :P :P :P so are ...

Murder shuold be pink. :lol:

You are a crazy avocado and I know some pretty crazy ones. Do you write all of your stories in that format? If you do... You are obsessed. :shock: :wink: ...

:o ... Wow. Thx! :D

The title really hooked me, line and sinker. It was ok but I somtimes could not tell who was talking, I will read more, when you write it.

I was gona use the plot as a story but poems are shorter...

I made it up on the spur of the moment! But really, it is my favorite poem so I put it there to see if anyone recognized the author (because ...

Great idea Snionk! I once read a book called My Life as a Bitch. Good book. READ IT!!!

I don't want to be reflective anymore envying and despiseing unreflective things seeking pathos in dogs and undeveloped handwriting and young girls doing there hair and all the castles of ...

Woot! Thx for the critque, I will keep it in mind. I had forgoten about this.