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Okay I took away both stanzas..I really didn't like them either and weRe confused about them. When I say a broken heart I'm talking about that sad feeling you get ...

Thanks again guys! And also it really is just a love for writing! :D

Oh my gosh thank you so much for that review nativecatcher! :) And everyone else too! :D

Sorry...I wanted a nice rhyme! :) I changed it though!

'Ello! I'd just like to say that your descriptions and everything were awesome! IMAGERY! :) I loved it!

I really do like this beginning a lot! It's very good and your descriptions mesmerize me! :) Keep up the good work! ~NinjaTOtheM@X~

Thanks GUYS! :)

I'm not really an expert on poems but I love this poem :) Keep it up! :)

fixed! :)

Thanks and sorry about the smiley....I just couldn't resist :)

Thanks for the advice Stella I'll make a revised one soon! :)

Thanks so much but I'd like to point out that I wanted the girl to have that huge change bc the dream was supposed to be happy so I wanted ...

Personally I think this is great and I also understand it should be a bit vague since it's in a six-year-old's POV but maybe expand a little more but other ...

I sorta rushed through with this one so it isn't my best...and I was lazy about the italicizing so hehe yes but anyways I'm revising it so thanks for everything...don't ...

Thanks for the comment! And I noticed that! I was just really hyped to be writing! Writing's a passion and I sometimes just get like WOOO! But thanks for the ...