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Cool poem. I must agree, I absolutely love that last line. :)

Why thank you BlackDaisy! :D And to you too xanthan. The comma shall be fixed but I'd like to keep "this boy." It just fits for me. Thanks though! :D

Berlin wall? Cool though. Sorry, I really suck at critiques. Nice and simple though. :)

This was cool. It reminds me of the movie "Spirited Away" and the train in that. Good movie too. That's a cool description of a train though. Cool.

I'm bad at naming things.

Beautiful. The last long stanza was especially cool. I don't really know what else to say. I suck a crits. So... yeah. Great job though, I love this.

Hehe! I like this. It's a very humorous poem. Nice job. It did make me laugh. :)

I thought this was good. I liked the ryhming. It fit. It had no similar pattern through out the whole thing but it was still good. Nice content too. Good ...

I thought this was good. I think you should look into poetry. Hey, I started out crappy, but you get better. This was way better than my first attempts though. ...

Another good haiku. Good idea at least, but your first line is 6 syllables long.

Nice Haiku. Good job... sorry there's really not much you can say about a three line poem. Other than I thought this was good. :) Welcome to YWS! ~Yoha

I liked this. It was really sweet. I felt sorry for the boy. I kept thinking that he'd escape. :P Good job!

Oh wow, thanks guys. Haha... what rhythm? I have no rhythm. What is this "rhythm" you speak of? Yeah, but really, I am rhythm-less. This was a fun poem for ...

It's funny that you say it's a "black and white" poem because I imagine it sort of like that. The images I see are in all black and white but ...

Yeah, none of that bothered me. I thought this was wonderful. Very good job. :D