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The story's building up quite well. I liked the battle sceen which was quite exciting. I think I'll keep reading this. Heres a few mistakes I picked up on You ...

I starting to really like this story, this chapter makes me want to read the next chapter. Kim your so talented for a first time writer, your descriptions are really ...

Hey Kim, I think this is quite an intersting story, I like how you captured my attention right from the begginning. Though i dont understand this line. This child that ...

Its a really good poem. The use of the repetition of perfect is good and its not plain at all i like the line Asserting my perfect nonchalance its kind ...

You know when i was reading this poem from like the new poems section, i was reading it and thinking hmmn, i was just thinking about this issue recently and ...

Yeah i quite liked this poem as well. I actually came cuz someone mentioned this one in ur other poem, i quite like the way u made the lines interact ...

Yeah i like the simplicity of the poem, and the dark emotions around it which is intersting, through it does seem a little like lyrics because of the repition used ...