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nothing rhymes with purple, is in fact, untrue. i believe a "hurple" is some form of riding equipment aha xD (in response to Luvsi, i do people that's assonant as ...

this is wonderful, with a particular strong opening and ending. it's a lovely original twist and i loved the spiderweb imagery. i also loved the internal rhyme in 'a billion ...

i have to say, this is wonderful. you have a way of introducing information to the reader without openly stating it so it feels more natural. also, i love the ...

this is a very original piece and i like it very much :D i've decided to add corrections to the original, in red. "It is a story of two very ...

first of all...i'm kind of neutral to this one. it has moments where i think it's good and then...well, it lacks impact for me. this is not meant to be ...

i like this (: it strikes me as one of those precious memories. is the narrator now an old woman, reminiscing? i feel that perhaps you ought to convey some ...

heyy (: the meter's mostly consistent, however, i have an issue with this: "And yet again I can’t decide To view with tranquility or spite? The loneliness the night will ...

brilliant! you know exactly what you're doing with meter and rhyming as none of the rhyming feels force and all flows wonderfully, letting the imagery shine through without being overshadowed ...

nettle dreams catch and snag on sweating skin and salty tears, ripping open gashes were smiles used to reside- you don’t know where you went wrong, when the path divided ...

"Like foot prints in the snow, making are print in the endless abyss, we move forward creating our path, just to have them covered ever so fast, just to remind ...