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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Doll

    A very abstract piece. Quite interesting, different from usual take on short stories, I like the sense of mystery around the people who are commanding the main character You use ...

    Aug 15, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: My Own Worst Enemy-Chapter Six

    I like the build up throughout the chapter and the surprise at the end (someone pulls her back) and look forward to finding out who this was. You have some ...

    Aug 15, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Uh, I wanted something to post, just to try it out

    This worked really effectively because, like said in other comments, the penny has been given human feelings which suggests that all inanimate objects, including the cushion, has a conscience. There ...

    Aug 15, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Dangerous Temptations

    Really good start, I like how there are two main settings, the present (Marissa's bedroom) and the past memories of her and Brad's relationships. I think you should use flashbacks ...

    Aug 14, 2008


History repeats itself. First as tragedy, second as farce.
— Karl Marx