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I LOVE THIS! I don’t really know exactly why, but this was incredible! It’s so cute, and the girl sounds like me :D. I had so much fun reading this, ...

I really loved this! This made me smile at so many parts, and I was completely drawn in on the first sentence. It reminds me so much of MY cat ...

Although I really love your writing, I can’t stand your characters this time around. There’s nothing original about them. Your main character- undeniably beautiful, super cool, with a fiery attitu

Note: Leave feedback, because I'm not sure if I'm gonna continue this story :] Misery hung in the air around me, but I was completely and utterly alone. i don't ...

key kerza :) wow this is way different than your werewolf story! i love it so far, not much to say except that I can't wait for more. keep me ...

I thought this was really great! The first part was amazing, but I got bored in the middle part. The beginning started off really good- we got to see Ayden ...

i really liked this because i could totally picture this psychopathic girl kind of contemplating the meaning of 'psychopathic'. It seems like a very mental thing to do, and i ...

I don’t understand why they had to make a path for Ayden. Couldn’t she just tell her mom she was spending the night or something? Or if she was sneaking ...

I ran over to her without thinking and brushed a few whisps of her that had fallen from her braid out of her face. Some of her auburn hair had ...

I liked this! :) it was really interesting, and a great sample of your story. could you give me a PM when you put more up? I would love to ...

I couldn’t really find anything wrong with it. The only thing I can think of is maybe you making the plot and dialogue a little less cliché. It feels just ...

I liked it! It was very good. I did notice a few things though. A lot of the time you repeat the same words over and over and it’s pretty ...

The first paragraph was a little weak, I think. The first sentence didn’t make much sense. If you read it slowly you’ll get what I’m saying. It felt like you ...

I agree with the others that your main character is a bit unlikable. The part that really put me off about her was when she was describing all her old ...

Great job on this! The buildings were tall and narrow on either side of me and it was drizzling lightly, the moisture soaking into my woollen cape, making it heavy ...