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Hey cosby =] Welcome to YWS! I love writing stories when I'm bored - that's when I end up making up the wildest characters =] I did find a few ...

Hey LoLauren =] Welcome to YWS! I think you have a good start to a story here and I'm intrigued to see where you're going to take it in future ...

Hey Kayla =] Does the ATL in your username stand for All Time Low, because I love All Time Low, hence the display picture =D Anyway, you have a good ...

Hey =] I definitely agree with the other reviews in that you should turn this into a story. It's a brilliant concept and there are so many ways you could ...

Hey =] I'm gonna take a look at this for you =] sat now before her. This seems to be worded a little strangly. Maybe try; 'sat opposite her.' Caroline ...

Hey =] I'm back to take a look at chapter one! Now, I know the describing of each character in detail worked in the prologue and it worked here too, ...

Hey =] Welcome to YWS! I think you have an interesting idea for a story here and I'm intrigued to read on =] You mananged to describe each girl with ...

Hey Olivia =] For the last three hours Kate had sat looking at the green velvet covered box laid open in front of her. I think this sentence would read ...

Hey =] The interesting title drew me in straight away, so props for that! As for the story, it seems pretty interesting at the moment; two siblings living a life ...

Hey =] Finally - a story written in second person that isn't at all terrible. Congratulations! As for the content of the story, I loved it. Your take on the ...

Hey =] This prologue flowed and read very well and I didn't find any mistakes that haven't already been pointed out to you. I agree with the reviewer above, in ...

Hey =] Nice idea for a story you have here =] In the short time that I’ve lived I have never, not even once, given a thought of how I ...

Hey =] I really enjoyed reading this piece and you managed to hold my attention the whole way through. I liked that, although it was sort of a sad story ...

Hey =] So, I liked this as a start to a story, but I definitely agree with everything that the above reviewer has mentioned. At the moment, the reader doesn't ...

Hey =] I don't really have anything grammatical or nit-piky to point out, but I couldn't not comment on this. I really loved the way you described everything and the ...