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wstoffel101

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I Stare.

    I like the texture of your piece. One thing I thought didn't fit was or when your tongue magnificently flips. But other then that it's pretty good. I agree with ...

    Jul 23, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Feeling of Death

    I like how it all flowed together but one part kind of seemed, choppy maybe? I held it in mine, just hoping it might Move. I loved the poem but ...

    Jul 23, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Break Up

    Wow, beautiful. I loved it. Almost had a tear in my eye honestly. I can kind of relate to Reba, my mother got married four years ago and he is ...

    Jul 23, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: She's such a Drama Queen Prologue

    I really enjoyed this! I like the descriptions and the imagery you used in the first paragraph but, keep doing it throughout the entire prologue. It's kind of confusing why ...

    Jul 23, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Little Do You Know, Breathing is a Privilige-Prologue

    This defiantly got my attention, I want to know more! I suggest you elaborate more on the heart condition she has. Explain more about it. Details are the key! Keep ...

    Jul 21, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Rush: Chapter 1

    I think Rush has potential. Maybe add more details, more ajd, and such, it seems a but bland. Maybe use this as a rough draft and do some revising. I ...

    Jul 21, 2010


Most people ignore most poetry because most poetry ignores most people.
— Adrian Mitchell