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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Just Another One Gone

    This is really good, and I really like the meaning behind it. It has a deep visual and emotional meaning, that you've done a very good job on. The only ...

    Wed Nov 16, 2011 8:58 pm
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: In the Waiting Room

    I liked this :). I was able to see it in my head very well, though I am having trouble grasping the emotion of it. I can tell that there ...

    Wed Nov 16, 2011 8:52 pm
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: The Lunatic

    This is very good, and strangely very cute as well, but I do have some issues with the format: Living in a society where you disagree with most of its ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:55 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Chapter One...

    I'm not entirely sure what this was supposed to be. If this is supposed to be multiple poems (I don't think it is though) I would suggest putting it in ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:44 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I didn't always love you.

    This is SO cute and I love it! :) Just wanted to fix a few things: I haven't always smiled when I see people kissing , But now when I ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:40 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Solitariety Predicament

    Alright, so this is really good, and I like the theme. I definitely know what you mean. I just wanted to point out a few things: For anxious as a ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:38 pm
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: If you hate me...

    This poem isn't bad, it has a good meter and rhyme scheme, but a few things did trip me up. First off, I don't like the constant repetition of that ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:25 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Screams in The Night

    I really liked this poem, though I feel as though the theme was very generic. I kinda had just a generic "themed" picture in my head. My remedy for this ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:15 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: How Two Things Fall Together

    Alright, so this isn't BAD per-say, it has a form of a meter, and it flows well enough, but it isn't coherent. Something should be concise, coherent, and complete. Yours ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:00 pm
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Hunt

    Ohhh.....well then....That's, interesting? I understood the poem (I think?) and (While a bit worried for your sanity, lol jks) it was a very good piece if you look at it ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 3:04 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Silly Me

    SO cute so cute so cute so cute so cute :). I love this. Have I mentioned I think it's cute? Just making sure....lol anyways, You did great job on ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 2:54 am
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: rotten

    Okie dokie, so first off, your punctuation was not exactly perfect. The poem was very good, but I would have a better first impression if the first letter of every ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 2:50 am
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Mama

    This was a very cute and dramatic short piece, it was emotional and visual. Your imagery is perfect, and your simile is exact. The only problems I see are the ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 1:57 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Goodbye, my friend (Adiós, mi amigo)

    Nomnomnomnom Me gusta :) hahaha. And you said you couldn't write? What do you call this then? This is gorgeous, in both Spanish and English :). Though it's funny to ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 1:39 am
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Writer's Block

    This is excellent, and very well written, but I do have some points I'd like to point out: Uh oh. I don't like this line. It takes away from the ...

    Tue Nov 15, 2011 1:08 am


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