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This was kinda cutish, but I feel as though you could write more. You say it's about a hunt done by mythical creatures, but I really wish you would try ...

So, this isn't bad and I like the ideas behind it, my biggest problems lay in your format and the fact that you tumble off topic in ways that might ...

This was really good. Confusing at times, but actually well thought out despite the sort of "rushed" feeling that I got. But the "rushed" atmospheric tone actually fits in pretty ...

Loveddd itttt :). But of course, I love everything you write :). I think it was perfect and adorable, and very patriotic surprisingly....lol :). Great job! You're such a good ...

This was really cute and I loved the sing song nature of it :) There was only one line that bugged me: A new morning's whisper stirs the broken, they've ...

This is amazing and very descriptive. I really liked it, and I don't like many non-lyric poetic styles, but this one if very good. Just a few comments, not many ...

I liked this piece a lot :). The meter was good and it was a cute, yet deep piece of writing that you obviously worked very hard to put together ...

Alright, so you have a good poem here, but your meter and rhyme is totally out of whack. Let me give you some advice on how to fix that: In ...

This was really cute and I really liked it. I really wish you'd add more to it honestly, as I feel like there's just so much missing here. It doesn't ...

This flows really well, and the imagery is interesting XD. The only thing I could suggest is that you try to make the first two stanzas flow better with the ...

Soooooo my name is Christina!!! Anyways, here's my advice :) I woke up with a weird taste in my mouth. You know, the sore throat feeling ;[ /b] the dryness. ...

I really liked the meaning behind this poem, but I do have one major thing that kept bugging me. The rhythm. You started off sing-song, and then almost went into ...

Erm....well, this is very.....Twisted. It's well written, and scary, I'll give you that, but it honestly just made me want to throw up. I'm not sure what was going on ...

LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE! Just like I love all of your work! :). You worked so hard on this and yours turned out so much better than mine! Lol, good luck in the ...

Alright, the general gist of this was very good, but here are some things I'd like to point out: There is no cure to force. This just grammatically does not ...