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Okay, I really like this poem but the only problem with it is rhythm and rhyming. It seems like every other stanza you attempted at a rhyme, and kinda failed ...

I thought this was very good and well put together (though a little long, that's not a bad thing) What I don't like is the fact that i really, even ...

I love this poem and I agree with you completely and totally. I think you did a great job in writing this and there's nothing that I can see that ...

Alright, over all this is a great poem, but your spelling is (no offense) horrible. I see most people have already corrected you here so I'm not going to go ...

okay this is just my opinion and these arent my favorite kinds of poems so if i'm wrong i'm sorry As he huffed far away, From his bill, (what bill?) ...

it's really good...the only thing i can find to comment on is that the flow is a little off but in a good way (as in it sounds right that ...

that was ...good...confusing...i didnt understand what was going on at first and i didnt understand if he was a figment of her imagination or if she was his or what ...

Say what? i didnt understand that much at all....i got it a little but there's nothing to it...you could try adding a reason or a background to it to make ...

it's good...there's no real grammatic errors and i cant think of anything really to say except good job....sorry i know that doesnt help at all lol but i always love ...

it was okay...confusing because i dont know what's going on yet...try making the chapter longer write some more and add more detail to the fight they had like not just ...

that was a good poem but it was confusing....strange....i didnt understand it until you started talking about dying....try defining the begining a little more to make it a little more ...

i've read this through a couple of times and it's great...i cant find anything worth only comment other than it's an amazing piece would be to recommend you write more ...

this is an amazing piece i'd love to read the rest of it....but have you ever thought about the fact that some one else can tickle you but you cant ...

i love this poem and think it could be amazing....but why dont you try formatting it like this so that the reader doesnt look at the lines and go "nope ...

i think this is a really good poem at first glance but there are some things about it that kinda threw me off... first of all the first two parts ...