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Thanks for such a great review. I know the end of this is kind of rough, I added it in last minute :) and the plot that is on here ...

It isn't very clear, but I think Johanna is a ghost. Maybe you could make this part a little easier to understand. Only a suggestion. :)

There was a particular table watched closely by a particular teacher. Derak Feldman. Mr. Feldman to the students and half the staff. Everyone knew not to me  I think it ...

I really like this story. I'm reading each story as it's entered into my contest. It has good suspense at the end. :D

Cataternity Haha, I like the word, rather clever.

I like your writing style, keep it up!!!

I need a better title Maybe you could call it "Grumpy and Snow White's Adventures of Resentment" It's the best I could come up with, sorry if it's no good.

Skwmusic : this is just backround about the locket and Cynthia, because they are very important to the rest of the story.

Thanks. When I added details to this before, I forgot to add the sentence about it being missing. Again, thanks for the help.

Heehee :D I like it. it would be nice to know how old all of them are. Can't wait for it to be finished.

I like it a lot. It is very suspensful and mysterious, which is great. I think add a few more details and it would be perfect. I would like to ...

Don't worry about it, spelling is hard to catch when you read your own writing, because your mind automatically corrects it. :)

It's got good potential. If you're writing it geared toward teens, then use more known words. Make sure to add lots of details. I would love to read more!!!

Good, there are a few typos; "don'g go changing" should be "don't go changing", and "fame got to your head" should be "fame go to your head". Keep on writing!

Thanks! I have redone my first two paragraphs , and now it looks so much better.