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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Robin Hood: Sell out, chapter 1 part 1

    Hey, emilygale, Wow, I loved it! Your writing style is pretty developed and I liked the way you wrote things. In the beginning of the story, I liked how you ...

    Apr 3, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Song of the Wind

    Wow, I loved it! Especially the first two lines. The picture of wind "dancing across your face was a beautiful picture! But I didn't get the "I am the melody" ...

    Mar 18, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Me Neither

    Hey oneeyedunicornhunter, First off, well done. The imagery was great. There were a few parts I really liked, such as: I think about waves pushing and pulling, The horizon decked ...

    Mar 16, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: A Compulsive Disorder of the Obsessive Variety

    Hey! Good job writing this piece. The words were well placed and easy to read. I liked the description of the line on the chalkboard being red. Just a good ...

    Mar 6, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: .

    Hey! First, awesome storyline. It was a pretty good idea overall, and the way you made the fairies not little, but people-sized was very imaginative. It was a little bit ...

    Mar 2, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: The Baroness, The Villainess

    Hey! You've got an interesting plot here. The idea that you have to be qualified to be a villianess is interesting. :) This could be a great story, but I ...

    Feb 19, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Pursuing the Princess, Part 2

    Brava! Brava! *claps handss vigorously* Loved the second part! Like I said, the two frineds have lots of character. Good job describing them, but what does Rune look like? Anyway, ...

    Feb 19, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Pursuing the Princess

    Hey! Love the story. I think the overall lplot is good, classic rescue the princess, but if you continue the story, I'd advise you to try to be really original ...

    Feb 19, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Last Good Man

    Hey EmmVeePi, This is pretty good. The intro was awesome; great job characterizing his walking stick and sending the reader into the direction you want them to be thinking while ...

    Feb 13, 2009
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Into the Giant's Land

    Hey Bokkaku! This was really cute. I understood it after I read the spoiler. It's not really that obcious that it is a toddler, but once the reader finds out, ...

    Feb 8, 2009
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: A War Worth Fighting For

    *whistles in admiration* I have a feeling this is an older post, but it wass really good just the same. The battle strategy was excellent; it wasn't just ripped from ...

    Jan 26, 2009
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Nancy Drew

    Hey Omi! You did a pretty good job on this piece. It really has the feel of a Nancy Drew mystery. I can tell you read them a lot. The ...

    Jan 10, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Blue Ice fire

    Whoa, this is really interesting. It actually seems more like Sci-Fi than Fantasy Fiction, but there may e more to come, so I'll let you decide. The plot is really ...

    Dec 20, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Escape from the Academy, Part 2

    Hey! Wow, really good job writing this. The action scenes were awesome, and the way you wrote it was really good. A lot of times, writers have trouble putting sentences ...

    Dec 19, 2008
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Mr. Smithers' Marvelous Multicolor Revolution

    Hey, nice job on this piece. I liked how you portrayed the gloominess of the town in the story. The whole thing had kind of a Twilight Zone feel to ...

    Dec 18, 2008


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