i know you said no corrections, but i can't help myself. you said "breathe" instead of "breath". one is a noun form, one is a verb form. sorry... but you need to accept constructive criticism in order to improve yourself. that's the goal, ya know?
anyway, i'm having a little trouble figuring out what the idea is behind the poem. you have some pretty good descriptive words in here though.
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