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The screams of agony pierce the eardrums, countered by the gently soothing voice of the aged midwife urging to the exhausted mother that; You make it sound here as if ...

ok neither do i no why u r writing at such a ridiculous time but yeh.. ermm im assuming the begininnings a sort of prologue, but im not sure it ...

looks good yeah very good. Has good tension, sounds original and definitely made me think in places. But: you used ya at least once, just wondering if ur going to ...