untameabletiger

It took me a second to catch on to what the rhyme scheme was, but once I did, I enjoyed the poem very much! It kept my attention, and I ...

You don't need the hyphens in this piece. I really liked all of the detail The ending, in my opinion was good, not weak. overall this was outstanding! keep up ...

over all, I like this a lot. But, to me, it sounds more like a narrative. This would be a really good story and i admire your work because I ...

I don't quite get the meaning of it. It's fantastic, and was detailed enough for me to picture some things.

This poem Is honestly one of the best I've read. You are VERY talented! I love your style. You should continue writing in the same style like LilySoulMahon suggested.Good job!

I really like this poem, but it doesn't really flow.

I love this Piece! It flows throughout the poem, but try to use more punctuation. (: --Hope(:

I completely agree with kingolions, and i think you should definitely continue. Some people have trouble with rhyming subtly being able to rhyme subtly without trying is a big advantage,and ...

This is awesome! I love everything about it! You are an amazing writer.I WILL be reading part two.