unicorn8672

I really liked your story. I wonder if you could have broken your story up into paragraphs instead of one huge paragraph. I wonder if you could have shortened you ...

I don't understand why you just started with the the word "farm". I wonder if you could have used more dialog. The story sort of seems like diary entries. I ...

I really liked the the time travel element in your story. I wonder if you could have used Ezra's name a little less. I wonder if you could have had ...

I really liked the format of a diary. I wonder if you could have made less spelling and capitalization errors. I liked how you wrote the day in English and ...