ultraviolet

Lalaland, No problem. I seriously did really like it. I'm glad you all like my script. It was my first one. I had just been browsing the scripts forum thingy ...

I absolutely loved it! Very interesting and creative. Keep on writing! :elephant: LOVE --ULTRAVIOLET

StoryWeaver, is this better? Or worse? I really do appreciate input. :smt001 :elephant: LOVE --ULTRAVIOLET P.S. Thanks Jessxrawkz! :smt003

Shade- How funny! And yes, I realized the present/past tense issue. I am paying special attention to this now, and am going to double and triple and so on check ...

Thanks guys. :) You know, it was fun to write this, but I would have nothing to write about. I don't read romance, so I could not come up with ...

Jasminebells. I'm not surprised that this reminded you of "I'd lie" by Taylor Swift. That's what originally gave me the idea. And as for the shortness of it all, yes, ...

You know Lilicia, your so right. Thanks for helping me pick out the flaws. :smt003 Does this description of Nancy seem better? Realistic? Input appreciated. And you like the ending? ...

Thanks Zibbie! Now that you bring it up, your suggestions do make it better. How do you like this start? Any better? I appreciate you taking the time to comment. ...