ultraviolet

Here again (this time on the right thread). bit other children so hard they needed stitches , and more. I know the bolded part makes the previous part seem worse, ...

I don't quite get why you have multiple chapter up on here, since you have them in your novel folder. Really, it makes it look kind of ugly, and really ...

Like Dudette said, this isn't awful - actually, it's quite good. Okay, I know this is only part one, but it feels really short. Cut off. I'd consider making this ...

Hi! Here to review this little gem for you. Okay, so I was looking through the forums for something to review. I normally dislike romance, but clicked on this anyway ...

(I am going to remember to review this, I am going to remember to review this, I am going to remember to review this...) Hey! I remembered. (Finally... >.>) Anywho, ...

Back here for a second go-through. :) First, I want to say that a lot of what I said before applies here, like the exclamation points and such. But I'm ...

Welcome to YWS, EAThomas! I'm ultraviolet, your reviewer for the day. First of all, love the title. It mixed two elements your don't normally see together, which tends to be ...

Hi! I'm gonna review this little piece for you. Sorry beforehand if I end up being harsh. It was a bright and colorful day, the blues were a glowing cerulean, ...

*applauds* And you know why I like this so much? Because while pretty much all of the other "5 reasons why" posts are mostly opinion (and highly exaggerated opinion at ...

Is this for a contest or something? Okay, so I feel kinda stupid for critiquing a fifty word story, but for some reason I feel compelled to. This is nice, ...

This is pretty good. The first four lines flow really well, with a nice rhythm, but I felt the lines after that was lagging. Probably because of this line: I ...

I disagree with Justagirl - the "Dark and Deadly" times are what this piece is about. I found it perfectly fine to have in there. So I'm not really good ...

Hi! First, I just want to say that this is really good. I can't really find much to comment on, but I did feel a bit of rhythm lapse in ...

Hi! Here to review for you. :) Okay, so on the "7 Simple Rules For Stronger Prose" how people were telling you things like "more description" and stuff, but weren't ...

Oo! A poem on NaNoWriMo! That's actually what I'm supposed to be doing right now. Anyway, I like this. It really shows how NaNo takes over your life for a ...