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I agree with Upile, the consistent pattern is impressive. This poem inspired me to go outside and walk my dog. Thank You. p.s. I really like your username and your ...

It sees the darkness clouding in that is death, Which reeks of pollution, and its endangered inhabitants. ^These are the only two lines that don't ryhme. I know this may ...

This is wonderful. It's short and sweet, no it's so much more than short and sweet. It's full of feeling, and even though it is short, it has structure and ...

"Athena sat down and started to weave, telling the story as she did it." Everything flows well untill the very last sentence. Something about ending the chapter with "it" is ...

I agree with WaitingForLife, this has a very good flow. To be truthful, at the begining I thought the narrator was a creeper. But the end explains it all and ...

“She wanted to get out of this tower, she wanted to eat when she was hungry, and not when Aurialla sent up the basket. She wanted to run around without ...

"kissed the baby girl for the first and last time." imagery! Kinesthetic Imagery evokes emotion! (sorry, couldn't help but utilize my recent AP Lang vocabulary) I'm still confused about the ...