Published February 8, 2011
Hard times come and hard times go, even when we don’t let it show.
Our faith in each other, friends and family alike,
often fades, put out like a light.
When we lose our faith… as hard as it may seem,
we have to remember there is reason for everything.
If we listen to the world… our pain becomes worse.
Sealing it in, making it a curse.
The world will try to tear you down, and make you believe that you will drown.
But there are ways to be sure the darkness does not prevail…
As long as you remember, that God never was, and never will be a fairytale.
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Amazing,absolutely amazing.I like your view of the world.I guess that's something we share.Keep up the good work.
This poem really got to me, it made me think of some problems I've been going through and it touched me, so for that I thankyou
I think you will do just as great at writing longer poems, and maybe next time have a go at trying a poem without rhyming words. These ones are more of a challenge as it can be harder to find a rthym, but a challenge is the perfect way to improve your skills (even though they are already really good ^_^)
Thanks so much! All of you! The reviews mean alot to me!!
Hard times come and hard times go, even when we don’t let it show.
Our faith in each other, friends and family alike,
often fades, put out like a light. *nods head*
When we lose our faith… as hard as it may seem,
we have to remember there is reason for everything. *smiles*
If we listen to the world… our pain becomes worse.
Sealing it in, making it a curse. *grins*
The world will try to tear you down, and make you believe that you will drown.
But there are ways to be sure the darkness does not prevail…
As long as you remember, that God never was, and never will be a fairytale. *cheers*
Fantastic job! It just got better and better and it has a sweetness to it despite the difficult truth it conveys.
Love it, you obviously love to express yourself and that's just what you have done.

Nobody can take your beliefs away from you and if you speak them aloud they may become reality to more people.
Keep writing
This is wonderful. It's short and sweet, no it's so much more than short and sweet. It's full of feeling, and even though it is short, it has structure and develops well. Hard times tearing us down down down, just when the poem is at is saddest, the last line offers light and gives me a couple chills. The reviewing checklist says that I should say something that I don't like, but I can't think of anything.
Keep writing, and always keep that faith.