Published February 23, 2011
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I really liked it. It has a good meaning and could be used for many people in all sorts of different situations. Good Job
Hello
Great poem you got here. I liked the message. I can see why you chose your username!
I thought what you wrote was pretty cool. Although I'm not too sure if such repetition is necessary. It sounded off to me:
But I suppose the message was well received. So good job.
It's merely my own opinion, but I feel like this would sound better if you changed the word "learn" in the second line to "seek". ..seek what's over there. Anyway, nice job dude. Liked your poem a lot.
I agree with Upile, the consistent pattern is impressive. This poem inspired me to go outside and walk my dog. Thank You.
p.s. I really like your username and your photo. This poem reflects both. Keep Smiling
Hey there,
. Only one tiny little thing I noticed though, 'ment' is incorrect, it is spelled 'meant'.
Wow this poem is so simple yet so gripping. that's beautiful. I really like it, i like how you kept to the pattern, how its such a happy poem that is trying to teach people how to live right. Amazing. I really think it is well-written so I applaud you, I have no bad comments only praise so smile.
My favorite lines were the last stanza:
"Days are ment to be spent with delight
Not doubt and despair,
Take a deep breath and go outside
Get some fresh air."
Bravo!
xxx Upile xxx