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Thanks for the comment. I appreciate it! :D

Thanks for reading/reviewing! The strong point is definitely the characters. I intended this to be of the 'literary' genre, which means it's a character study more than it's full of ...

He wasn't meant to be hated, but understood. When one understands a person, it can be hard to hate them, as much as you want to. Glad you liked it!

Thank you. And I'm glad you liked it! That makes me happy, haha. ;)

Woah I completely missed both of those things. You're right. Thanks mate!!

Thank you! And, I'm still having trouble myself with those dialogue tags, so I may have told you something wrong. I tried to remain true to what I had learned. ...

Try to include a memory or flashback of how they spent time together as kids. Something like that would show us how they played together and would be less tell-y.

Thank you, this feedback does help me. I had intended to explore different relationships in this piece. Alyssa being so open to Mr. Thomas will be explained a little later, ...

This is so short and full of telling that it isn't very impacting emotionally...

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Thank you, mate!! I'll be sure to PM you for future revisions :D

I loved this work and the second one too. It was amazing and I really liked your character dan! He was exactly as you described him and I'm very glad ...