trailcoyote

Hello there :P First of all: Bum bum BUMMMM. Suspense!! And such things. This is great and overall very well written (of course). Also mildly stressful haha. I do have ...

Hello friend! So: I really liked this poem. I liked how you conveyed the emotion and feeling of sickness, and overall, I think you did an excellent job. Here are ...

Friend! I'm so sorry that you feel that way!!! I hope life starts getting better!!! I really liked how you did your emphasis–it's not in the places one would expect ...

I think I've heard this one, but I still super like it! Just so you know. I really like the line: "A blaze is much too angry to disarm; it's ...

Hello, friend! Okay, let's get down to business. First off: "life has been falling down to the worse for a anxious-stricken." This is just awkward. I understand the basic premise ...

All right. Let's do this. To begin, your hook needs some improvement. While this is an impressive fact, it doesn't necessarily draw your reader in. Next: it feels choppy. Your ...

I really like this! When you talk about the spark, I liked how you contrasted the importance of time to the spark versus the importance of the spark to time. ...

Hello there! So first off, this is pretty great, and I like the concept. "Leslie Vaughan has lost the manual for her brain," is a pretty fantastic hook, immediately setting ...