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Hey there, Rory! I never saw the original version so I can't comment on any changes in that respect, but here I go anyway XD I didn’t even realize it ...

Hwaaaaa! What's wrong with me? We don't know that anything's wrong. You're just different. By human standards, that is wrong. That's not true. Tell me what is. By human standards? ...

Oh, Sumi; I always love your crack. ♥ I don't remember how long ago it started. Maybe it didn't begin, and I was simply born with it, but either way, ...

I'm Ba~ck. This may or may not be a good thing ;) one moment I had been surrounded by caged animals and anticipating my upcoming drug fix, and the next ...

How did I not notice that there was more of this until now? *flails* and a grey door with the number ‘eighty three’ printed on it This doesn't sound right ...

*waves* Yo, Sureal! a transparent mask is placed over his mouth to assist his laboured breathing. His skinny chest rises and falls erratically under the blue hospital gown. This seems ...

I'm not too keen on them; they all seem a little bit repetative to me XD But my sister's heavily into them which I say can only be a good ...

Why hi there! One, the Head Librarian, taught me that I have nothing to fear from the second world, while the first is an enemy to conquer. In the daylight, ...

This is very good! Much better than the other drafts, the only thing that I'm not too sure about is the last sentence, it feels quite a strange tone to ...

I think I was more shocked about the fact your house caught on fire O_o I found this quite funny, it's stuffed with Sumi-humour. I would pick out certain points, ...

You need to extend this, if I take out the part in bracktes, which you say you aren't going to include, it comes to just over 2,000 characters, remember you ...

Many women have found themselves his mistress, with nothing to show for it but a spoiled reputation and an illegimate child or two. Loved that line! I quite like them ...

I was really heavily into them when I was a kid, I had all the books until Loamhedge came out. My favourite was Pearls of Lutra , and I loved ...

Woah, nice and long! I'm at college at the moment, and about to dash off for lunch, so I'll get round to having a look at this when I get ...

Isaac Sperone had a most remarkable pair of boots. Interesting first line ^^ very good for snatching the interest of the reader; it certainly caught mine! and had seen them ...