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Re: Alaina's File
Wow the story sounded really good and there were hardly any typos i just think you need to stop using so many commas, if you use a connecting word such ...
Dec 4, 2010 -
Re: The Double Life Chapter 1: The Past and the Present
wow i thought this was really good, you have great characters, you describe them well and show how they feel.i think your plot is going to unfold well and there ...
Nov 20, 2010 -
Re: Our neck of the woods, Part one
i thought this story was really good, you have a great plot going on and your characters are very good. As the story went on it got even better i ...
Nov 19, 2010 -
Re: Caught in the Waves
wow, this was really good and very moving i loved how you did the ending,talking to her family even though they couldnt hear her. the only problems were that you ...
Nov 19, 2010 -
Re: Yearning for You
i thought this was really good and loved the way it improve you could maybe give a little background info, not too much but i wanted to know what the ...
Nov 14, 2010 -
Re: Three Simple Rules
wow really good writing, i loved the description and vocabulary you used. He will not have me. He says he does, but he’s a bad liar i dont think this ...
Nov 14, 2010 -
Re: The List *More**
well first off i thought it was really good and the ending made me wanted to read more, what was written on the letter?? Some sparles followed after them i ...
Nov 14, 2010
