thunderwolf490

i agree with quietloud798..... i also like how you dont say out right that this is about love right at the beginning. it gives the read something to look forward ...

A dream with no fate, A fate without a soul, A soul with no body i think that it should say "A fate with no soul" because when you switch ...

i loved this story. and dont worry you are not the only one out there that cant spell. My friends all laugh at me because when i am writing a ...

i really like this.. the only thing i saw wrong was the spelling on one of the remembers at the beginig. No sight but the gloom of the flat watertool ...

this is my favorite stanza in this poem. i like how you used a lot of different words for love and togetherness instead of saying them over and over. on ...

this stanza does not have the same rythem as the rest. your abab thing is still right but your words seem to chopy and dont flow together like the rest ...

the only part that really doesnt make any sense to me is He doesn’t know how I care what people say And how I can't keep my feelings at bay ...