thewritingdoc

It seemed like lines from a book. Overall, I liked it very much though. Maybe poems are not your style and that's okay. But this line would really captivate me ...

The ending left me hanging. I wanted it to finish. I felt as though it was not adequate enough. "I will never be complete without it" is a very cliche ...

I dislike how you sometimes made it seem as if it was robotic writing, cold, true, writing. For example, using phrases like "For I am." It sounds very formal. Then ...

I thought this poem was beautiful. I really visualized summer in my mind. You got just the right touch of softness in this poem that I felt was needed. I ...

Some of your ryhmes seem forced at times. For example, "Somebody who has hair like a mop," You could have done much with that line. NEVER, EVER, let the ryhimg ...