theotherone

Hello there. :) Another chapter! Yay! :) But when I stood up and looked around comma I saw that something was wrong. Just like the dream I had had the ...

Hey twinnette. ;) I didn't want to be the first review, but every time I wait for someone to review first, I forget... So here I am! even though you might ...

Hello there. :) A few nitpicks for you. ;) My brother in particular seemed to be cozying up to Logan's colleague, Dr. Rita. She was the woman who had done ...

Hello there. :) Wow, impressive story. I love it! It makes me think about myself a lot. I use to fall asleep at night thinking about a guy that I ...

Hello there. :) Corrections in red, comments are in bold. I couldn't hear myself think over the pounding of the bar's loud obnoxious oldies, men and women both droning on ...

Hello there. :) Just the feel of his lips pressed against hers, his hand roaming across her stomach, his tongue just barely grazing the inside of her mouth, exploring what ...

Hello there. :) Corrections are in red, comments in bold. Authors note: It is a bit short, so if you find parts where description is needed please let me know, ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with some nitpicks. Don't worry, it's just little typos. :) If I could only hold you in my arms one last time. I didn't care ...

Hello there. :) I really enjoyed your story, but I think that Tommy was right. Maybe put some more info on who is actually the other girl? Apart from that ...

Hello there. :) I must say that I'm quite confused right now... I don't know if you meant to leave us that way or not, but it's kind of driving ...

Hello there. :) I raise an eyebrow, directed at her and am glad for the absence of the kid that is normally between us. She smiles quickly and nods hurriedly ...

Hello there. :) I smile wanly at her when she glances back at me for a moment. Another great chapter! I don't think I've got anything bad to say... So ...

Hello there. :) Giselle De Pompadour comma I liked that. I just had to get used to it. I looked out my huge window comma at the things that make ...

Hello there. :) Wow, that was a powerful story. And original as well. I must say that I was impressed, and I'm still in shock. :) I didn't have any ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin the the few nitpicks I've noticed, and then go on with my overall impression. For once comma I felt special. Our brain puts a natural ...