theotherone

Hello there. :) Another flawless chapter... It's getting pretty intense in there. I really liked the part where she dances, you did a really good job at making us feeling ...

Hello there, I'm here as requested. Sorry for the wait, I'm just busy these days. So here we go with the review. :) First off, the flow was good, even ...

Hello there. :) Her face darkened. “I love what you’re doing with your hair these days. It’s called ‘the air head look’ isn’t it?” Is it Aiden's words or Cassie's? ...

Hello there. :) I found a few mistakes, which Cailey pointed out. Please review and correct them. :) The story itself was really short and I would like to see ...

Hello there. :) Like Disenchanted, I feel like the format isn't the best to present your story. It's overwhelming at first, and too much for the eyes. It is probably ...

Hello, I'm here to review as requested. :) I said in my thread that I wasn't too good at reviewing poems... And I meant it. But I'll do my best ...

Hello :) I saw a few mistakes when I read the chapter. Just proof read it fast and you should be good. :) My heart was racing with nerves and ...

Hello there. :) Let's make this review, since I've been complaining that it has been a long time, it wouldn't be fair if I would take my time. ;) By ...

Hello there.:) I'm not the best when it comes to poetry, so who am I to review this? But I'll still try to do my best and give you advice ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression on your story. I wanted to tell you all that time , that I ...

Hello there. :) Her drawings comma, her lovely almost perfect drawings swirled. He turned to tell the man that they didn't except American money but the man had jumped out ...

Hello there. :) I'll quote the whole thing so it's easier for me to correct, and for you to see as a whole. the corrections will be in red, and ...

Hello there. :) It's me again, so you should know how I do my reviews. ;) The other, North St H igh was government run and although successful in music, ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression on the review. Fingers assaulted by the cold, he turned the lock comma, hearing ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with a few nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression on this chapter. Just calm down. You’re fine…he didn’t do anything. He was ...