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I loved it! I think the way it is in written is perfect to get across the ideas you wanted too, and i'm very interested in the love triangle that began to form. I noticed multiple spelling errors scattered across the piece (mostly typos i assume, but i thought it was worth a mention) but other than that it was very good!

LOL, love the little note at the bottom for us Americans! Your piece had humor and the start of conflict (love triangle!) And you definitely got into character. You put a lot of voice into your writing. Can't wait to read the next chapter!
-tgirly