thefireinmeisJC

Hello! This was interesting actually. I agree with the others - some parts were a little boring so I simply skipped two paragraphs or so to get to the who, ...

I agree with KJ. There's too many "they this" and "they that". Show don't tell. I liked the beginning though. Nice description though just an afterthought: how can your fur ...

Its ok. Sorry, if I burst your bubble but its really cliche as people have already said but you use the same few words over and over again. For example ...

Ok, this review won't be of absolute help to you since everyone else beat me to all the nitty gritty stuff and I totally loved it so no worries there..... ...

First of all, Welcome to YWS! I'm disappointed in you to say that you are "only" 14. 14 yr olds rock and can do anything! right... ok, back to the ...

I'm slightly disappointed with this one. I actually can give a true review. I always found magnetism interesting, how one solid force could have so much control over another. Magnets ...

okie dokie, I'm back again. Jacob took enough to make a simple sandwich – bread, cheese, and bologna without the rotted circles around it and the opened back of potato ...

Yeah I agree with Buscador!, the beginning of any novel is the one of the most important things to look out for because thats the first taste the reader gets ...

Macs took care of all the nitty gritty but the first thing that came to my mind when I read this was "Don't say she was raped now!" To keep ...

Welcome to YWS! I don't know someone has already told you this but we like to keep a 2:1 ratio here with reviews and posts. aka before you post anything ...

This was pretty good even though it was only a few paragraphs. Though I would have to say that to be a prologue it needs to be longer. Make sure ...

I agree with dark_angel, this is a very emotional poem. I will always have feelings for others I relate to this stanza, hence I really hope that you do get ...

This was great of course. The only things that bothered me were: I was glad that the peroxide bottle had a securely fastened lid. I bent down to recover the ...

Interesting peice. I basically agree with everyone else. You need more description etc but the main problem is that I had trouble following what was going on. Remember to make ...

Ted Dekker is ok. I don't know if you know but he writes Christian fiction. So, I like him as an author because of that but when I read um...what ...