thatannagirl

I'm not sure, but I think people have the wrong idea. It's supposed to be a little confusing if it is told from the point of view of a psychopath! ...

Ooooh! Grades = suspense. Let us know how you do. :)

Ahhh.

Yes, I liked it. What I had time to read. :) I always find it fun to write cool/weird/mysterious scenes without knowing what in the world is going on, but ...

Besides the fact that it was obvious that the main character was a vampire, that a beautiful girl is alone in a building that is all but falling apart, that ...

Great, I can't wait to see the next chapter. *gold star for you*

I'm not a great critique of grammar, but I have to say it was a bit confusing. You have some GREAT metaphors and similes, though, and it was an interesting ...