thaddaeusj

I think this plot has a lot of potential to it, there are just a few things that could be fixed. For example, for me, some of the dialogue was ...

I actually really enjoyed this. I thought it would be dumb, but after reading it I was proved wrong. I just really wish it were in complete book/story form or ...

This was a pretty good script for it being your first. I just have a few things I found wrong. First, I know you mentioned that the parents were divorced ...

I really enjoyed reading this piece. The thing that really kept me interested was comparing the situation to a movie. I really enjoyed that. The only thing I think that ...