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Thanks for the review, I didn't mean for Luke to have a cold! With the last section I probably should have made the change of POV more clear Thanks for ...

Hi Pretzelsing, Thanks for the detailed review. I tried to use repetition to emphasize the character's frame of mind, but I may have overdone it. I definitely could also develop ...

Thanks Firelight!

Thanks Yizhongt, I definitely should have proofread my work more thoroughly.

I know, I just fixing a typo in one of my comments!

Another typo, pointing*

Thanks Falconer for point them out! Typos are so annoying!

You're welcome! I look forward to hearing spring's part in this tale!

Hi Cdog The last paragraph I should have made a lot clearer. I should definitely use more imagery, that is one of the parts of my writing I really need ...

Hi Arctic Monkey, (are you a fan of the band?) Thanks for the review. I agree with you on the first paragraph, (it is way too long). It is my ...

Hi Wolfare, Thanks for the feedback. I think the situation with the phone call does need to be a lot clearer. I tried to use a metaphor in "kicking a ...