strangeshellie

I quite enjoyed reading this (: Its a really lovely poem that keeps you wondering in a way... (don't know if that made sense...) It's really beautifully written! great job!

Wow! i actually enjoyed reading this (: i love your unique writing style, it makes it interesting to read! (:

Hey man! this was so beutifully writen and the words just seem to flow. I would concider extending it so readers can capture more of the emotion behind this and ...

Hey I like this poem and the amount of emotion that is shown. However, there are some bits that didn't show any which confuses me about how I'm supposed to ...

Hey This is a really good start and the storyline is interesting. In my opinion I don't think you should mention how old the character is, just mention that its ...

Hey :) Ok, so I kinda like the idea, but I think the formatting in this needs to me fixed a little. There are also a few minor problems that ...

Oh wow, I really liked this :) I loved how the character of Pete was talking about the fly. I loved the amout of imagry that is used and the ...

Hey there, I love the idea behind this poem :) However, It's a bit hard to focus on anything because of the way it jumps around. I get what you ...

I really liked this! however, in my opinion you were telling too much in the beginning so it kind of made it seem like it just kept going...mayve try describing ...

I think it's a really good poem :) I love how discriptive you are especially in the beginning well done :)

I really love this poem. It's so beautiful and it really flows :) I think you should maybe extend it... because It's really good so far :)

Hey I love this idea. It's really captivating (to me). I also feel like this could be longer, because to me it sounds like a beginning and I think you ...