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The chatspeak scene was rather accurate. As everyone has already pointed out, the lunch scenario seemed a bit... off, but other than that it was quite realistic. Most writers can't ...

I love this story, and its definately one that I can relate to. The thing that gets me is this: Adopted parents wouldn't force their adopted child to respect their ...

I was waiting for her to kill her parents throughout the entire story. For one reason or another, I thought that she would think that if she took a knife ...

Being a mormon myself, I found this poem unbelievably ironic. Well done :D Unfortunately, my lack of knowledge about poetry leaves me with the inability to critique poems. Sorry.

Other than what others have said, this is my one critique: She punches him WAY too much. Its to the point of breaking character, getting on the reader's nerves, and ...

Ed, you always manage to astonish me. Though I'm sure it has some sort of meaning to it, I really can't see it (Yay for me and my lack of ...

His wording is absolutely brilliant. I love the way that you used words to make him truely seem like an abandoned child. Wow.... wow. There were a few wording mistakes ...

Wow, say Wow, wow. You know, I absolutely loved this story. The wording seemed a tad bit juvinile (I love how I spell that wrong!) at parts, but it seemed ...