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I enjoy the conversational tone of this. It works really well for the, uh, suject of the piece, and you were able to make it sound like you (the narrator) ...

This kind of sounds like an ad against drunk driving or something...you know...the ones where they tell the story about how, "Mary had never been to a party before. She ...

I read Narnia for the first time last year...talk about a deprived childhood. I love C.S. Lewis. The Dawn Treader is my favorite...the part where Aslan is peeling off Eustace's ...

Great stuff. Reads at a great pace. Amusing at times and intense at others. I'm very interested in learning more about Barduev. Your description, while simple, has managed to say ...

Let's see...I've read Tess of the D'Urbervilles , Jude the Obscure , The return of the Native , and The Mayor of Casterbridge , as well as some of his ...

Good stuff. Nice images and tone. Also great that its not all about you. Poetry can sometimes be an excuse to rant about our problems, have you noticed? Its challenging ...

The parentheses are daring, because they're a technique you either enjoy or dislike. I love them. They kind of...give the reader a subconcious understanding of the uncertain balance of the ...

I think the description of the umbrella is lovely. It makes you read the poem more then once- the second time, for me, being when I realized the poem was ...

“AHHHH!!!!!!!” screamed Debbie, “It’s a Furby. AHHHHH!!!!!! Santa got me what I asked for!” Her father took his eye away from the camcorder. He looked at Her mother. Screaming gives ...

This is great stuff! Very affecting. The description is lovely, and I can't find any sentences that need reworking. Superb symbolism, too, I must say. I'll point out to you ...

I agree with Amice in that while free verse is a perfectly fabulous form of poetry, there still remains the need to separate the piece from prose, to give it ...

I love Anna Karenina. Its one of my favorite books, although I avoid mentioning it in conversations because I'm not sure how to pronounce the title. :oops:

You have a good idea here. What you've written is well-worded and grammatically sound. Very good work. One think that I might draw your attention to is the mother's dialogue. ...

I love the occasional alliteration and curious little rhymes. I am a fan of poetic prose in general- so I am also a fan of this. I don't see much ...

I enjoyed Jane Eyre, but I wouldn't say it has impacted me personally. And autobiographical influences are obvious. Most would say that is a sign of bad writing, but I ...