starlitnight

small question, did you intend to write this all in italics? not that it's important, just interesting. also, make sure to check capitalization! the letter "a" doesn't always have to ...

honestly, why did i start this in the middle. i want to know the beginning! maybe i'll do that. i'm intrigued about literally everything in this story. there's so many ...

first off, this has caught my interest. maybe it's because they're exploring a haunted mansion? who knows. i know that this is like the middle of your story, sorry about ...

first, this is cute! i love the interactions between the main character and his best friend (apon is such a cute name!). maybe it's because i haven't read the other ...

not going to lie, this confused me a lot for a split second haha. XD but i definitely get it now. you're mixing a lot of different things that you've ...

THE BOY WITH THE STONES IS FERRIS AHH. okay now i feel bad, he was in the first chapter and if ii remember was already associated with stones. i think. ...

let me just say daffodil (that is her name right?? ack, now i feel bad) is by far my favorite character. maybe it's because she's found a way to survive, ...

well heck is all i can say for this chapter. i'm definitely scared right now and extremely intrigued! there's just a small extra space here by the way! easily fixable. ...

to start off, is the first character we're introduced to here new? or am i just dumb and forgot who he was...maybe i just did. i couldn't find his name ...

wow this is really good!! a couple of sentences really hit me hard. like i had never thought about life and me as a person or people in general like ...

awww, i'm definitely immersed in these characters now~ but this new family, are you trying to portray them as a little suspicious?? because i am definitely getting that impression. also ...

well crap, that ending is giving me chills. i hope she doesn't run into that boy (or maybe i do?? who knows). small note, there should be a space between ...

okay honestly this is so funny even if the person writing it is going to die. it makes the letter seem so lively, yet there's this hint of foreboding lingering ...

uwahhh, this is...wow! i really like this! you really captured the main character's feelings, even if he (is it a he..??) just repeats the same words three times. i can't ...

oo i like this poem! i definitely relate to the poem, especially when i'm going through a tough time mentally. just one small question though. By Silent night sky is ...