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Where's the punctuation? No commas, periods? How are we supposed to know where to stop and take a breath? And Ain't, isn't a word. The girl not only has two ...

Wow, I really liked this! I'm not the best person to be taking advise from, but don't change it. I love it the way it is. Sorry this is so ...

Thanks Roon, And I will do everything you said :) ~Spy

On the fifth line, I think it would sound better if you would take out the word "really". The second time the girl speaks, I don't understand how the sixth ...

Hey, I do what I can to help. :D Graet haha

bloodyblackrose really thank you ^^

Hey SpyOh!!!! :smt024 Hahahahahaha!!!!!! If you didn't notice, I liked ALL of it!!! :smt002 This was very heart warming and heart felt... wow. 8) My favorite line is: i feel.... ...

Hello there :) I personally think you should have stopped at the first part. I like how you manipulated your words to go around the poem, very creative even though ...

Hi, Spy! Thanks for your request. Although I don't review poems, I'll make yours an exception, but bare in mind that just as your mother tongue isn't english, my fortay ...

And i forgot to say that i love it :)

That's really good poem Keep it going Huthaifa

Thats, quite alright :) I hope I helped :D Yes a lot haha Try to come and review always ok :) Thanks

Hello Huth! I liked this! There are a couple of pointers here thought that I would like to go through. English isn't your native language so this is impressive :) ...

Hmm... I kinda agree with the others. I can't tell if I like it or not. I can definitely see grammar and punctuation mistakes, the rhyming didn't flow well ( ...

retrodisco666 and AutumnSun thank you guys And shanan-cat i will try to make it better next time :) Thank you all