spiritblackwolf2705

Very nice! The only problem I found was that there were a few words that needed to be fixed like: As dawn broke and the shimmered into view, he watched ...

Wow, tell your sister she has talent. It is very rare that I see young people interested in writing anymore....they have all fallen for the gorey fun of video games. ...

Okay! Good job, the rhymes were awesome. Now I must point out some things that need to be fixed: You need to capitalize! And you need to use puncuation! and ...

Really great...leaves me breathless every time. Nothing wrong with it at all, no errors to point out. You're a special person, you can get me to stop playing guitar hero ...

Hmm...I'm not trying to be harsh but the only things I could really get about that piece is that you were betrayed. You didn't tell how you were betrayed, only ...

Okay, I found a few things wrong with this. Peace is a dove who spreads peace with it's love I think you should start a new line after dove. I ...

Wonderful! It was very interesting and kept me reading. You gave excellent descriptions of the male werecat. One spelling mistake I found: In tje 3rd paragraph you wrote slightly sallow, ...

Hmm. It was pretty good. I could alomst feel what you were feeling when you wrote it. But the rhyming was a bit confusing. You would rhyme every other line, ...

Hmm, I agree. It would be better as a story, few peoms have dialouge in them. So, try converting it to a story, it would be a lot better. Not ...

Great story. I love it when characters black out and appear somewhere else, it gives stories a sense of mystery. You rarely find stories about werecats, you mostly find werewolves, ...

Very nice! And what this poem is about is very true. There was a story I was told, one day a young man planed to kill himself, because he had ...