Roses revived(the rejection)

by littlezeus92
  • December 20, 2007
  • Poetry
  • Lyrical

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jenni321
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jenni321 commented · Sun Dec 23, 2007 2:53 pm

I love your poem! there are a few puncuation, capitalization, and spelling errors, but the message is really deep and sweet. keep posting, i'd love to read more!


jenni321

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spiritblackwolf2705
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spiritblackwolf2705 wrote a review · Fri Dec 21, 2007 1:33 am

Okay! Good job, the rhymes were awesome.

Now I must point out some things that need to be fixed:

You need to capitalize! And you need to use puncuation!

and you cant but these roses


I think 'but' is supposed to be 'buy'

and if you look hard
you might have some luck
you could find it growing wildly
and have it with a little pluck


The last stanza sounded a little choppy to me, but that's just my opinion.

(Not trying to be harsh. Overall, good job.



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