soccerfreak2516

The prologue didn't really hook me. It seemed long-winded, which made it difficult to read. one of my friends said something resembling this, and I have (since then) decided to ...

I'm gonna just post chapters here, so that I don't have like eighty threads for one story. Chapter 1-Calesta Show kindness to all, but especially to those who hate you, ...

This looks interesting so far. I noticed a few grammar mistakes, but if you read through it again, I'm sure you'll find them. Can't wait to see more.

whether you believe it or not, I've never heard that song... others by her, yes, but not that one. Yeah...the list of 'popular' music I've heard is kinda pathetic So ...

You're really good at description and imagery. Only problems I see are that a few of the lines are slightly awkward, and some punctuation needs to be changed or added. ...