snoopysoap

i think that your poem is a very good start to writing poems in general. poems don't always have to ryme though that is what traditional poems do. your poem ...

ok first off this is just confusing, if dyour nothing then how can you have eyelids and such? anyways, were you quoting V for Vendettea? its an awesome movie by ...

i like it, it creates an image in my mind, but i think you could describe the scenery a bit more, i mean i know that its not a story ...

ok first off there are a lot of words that you have used in the wrong tense, to fix these you should read it out loud to a wall or ...

ok the blue is the editing, i cant spell or do this right :D "You took your time coming for me, I’ve been waiting these last two years at least!" ...

hey durrie! i find that you lose me sometimes in your writing, it's just haphazard, you need to rethink some of your sentence sructures and stuff. i know i can't ...

i think you should go head and write more and post it on here but put a little bit more detail in and it might seem better but this is ...

This again fits with the other poems I have submitted on here, which all tell the story of a girl who eventually commits suicide. Once I stood in my human ...

this is brilliant work.... myself i would have no idea where to start to write something like this, but then again i have never been good a writing stuff like ...

hmmmm. you've given me inspiration thanks... maybe it will make my work a little better. how can i make mine better? this is one of my works though it isn't ...