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Sad. I agree about the line variation. I think you could maybe use a bit more... imagery or something just because it doesn't have a lot of feeling for a ...

LOVED the imagery. Parts were a little confusing, like when you said the part about when his head fell from his body... The way you described his appearance was very ...

I enjoyed it but I disagree about the rhyming part. Guenevere is said how it's spelt, and therefore does not rhyme with fair. It was a succinct way of describing ...

It's a good story line but the grammar wasn't very good and it put me off. I like how it started with a letter, and the descriptions are really good. ...