smanda4

I can defiantly relate to this and threw out the whole poem I could feel the pain. I especially like the way it’s laid out with the large space’s they ...

thanks everyone..................

hi thanks for the help wit the grama and speling. truthfully thoes are not my strong points rather my imagination is. thanks very much for the help

only had time to read the prologe i will read the rest later but it was good it grabs you. i liked it, keep writing it smanda4

i get the genral feeling of this poem and the idea it is trying to put across and i like it for that. however it seems to jump around alot ...

i think it is a good peace of writing. and it has a good mesage about going out and achiving for your self. i escialy like the first two lines. ...

well i like it but it does not seem to have a real maening or direction

it was a nice poem i liked the fact it rhyemed. its got a great holiday feel 8)

sorry it's suposed to be pain i must have missed that :?

i liked it. its simple and straight to the point. it has this feeling as you read it you actual feel like all your fears have realy gone and its ...

well the idea is good but it does not pull through as a poem. i think it would be a great begining for a story a realy good one actualy ...

i love the idea and it drags you in to it. makes you feel involved in what it is going on its great