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Re: These Scars
I agree with BlueAfrica about the cliche - you use many throughout the poem and I think you could do well to add your own imagery as to what love ...
Oct 5, 2010 -
Re: I Don't Write Love Poems
This is adorable! I agree with the above comment that having YWS on its own line in the first stanza is a little awkward. 'moon shine'. I'm KatTrain of YWS, ...
Oct 5, 2010 -
Re: Missing Italian Sands
First of all - good job! The poem itself is beautiful and paints a lovely picture. My criticisms will be extremely nitpicky, but bear with me. They're really quite small ...
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: (I'm) A Shadowed Girl
You were a deep twelve year-old! This is really insightful considering your age - I'm surprised you were able to get your thoughts down so coherently back then. The rhyming ...
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: Understudy
I love the italics - they really give you a voice. I like that you didn't use punctuation - it adds to the emotion - but I think you should ...
Oct 4, 2010